horrid henry

Posted on December 9, 2015 by Polly
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3 Responses to horrid henry

  1. Jude BERRY says:
    December 9, 2015 at 2:32 pm

    * Good storyline.
    * You used brackets.
    WISH: You could use some better openers e.g. -ly, -ed, -ing / Fronted Adverbials.

  2. Polly JACKSON says:
    December 9, 2015 at 4:00 pm

    Thank you for your comment!

  3. Amelia ROGERS says:
    December 9, 2015 at 4:11 pm

    Outstanding story, Polly!!

    * Great synonyms used.
    * Good sentence types.
    WISH: Try and use less ellipsis next time.
    Well done Polly!!

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