horrid henry story sb

Posted on December 9, 2015 by Sophia BURGESS
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6 Responses to horrid henry story sb

  1. Miles CUTLER says:
    December 9, 2015 at 3:57 pm

    *Good job! You used great punctuation.

    *Great! You used babbled.

    wish: Use paragraphs.

  2. Erin HOLLOWAY says:
    December 9, 2015 at 4:17 pm

    Well done, Sophia.
    *You used your knowledge of paragraphs to space the sentences out.
    *You used different words for said E.G shouted, screamed and whispered.
    WISH-Don’t put a huge page and don’t use it all.=)

  3. Evie-Mae N. WELLS says:
    December 11, 2015 at 7:39 am

    Great work Sophia!
    *you used great punctuation
    *Good paragraphs
    WISH~you don’t need lots of brackets!:)

  4. Evie-Mae N. WELLS says:
    December 13, 2015 at 12:58 pm

    Great!

  5. Sophia BURGESS says:
    December 14, 2015 at 8:35 am

    Thanks Erin, Evie-Mae and Miles

  6. Katie J. CUNNINGHAM says:
    February 4, 2016 at 7:53 pm

    Hi Sophia! I LOVED your story HORRID HENRY’S FIRST DAY AT SCHOOL!

    * You used fab adjectives- marched, babbled.

    *You used paragraphs.

    *You used brackets.

    WISH-Remember, new speaker, new line.

    WISH-Don’t make a massive page and only use half of it-make a page as big as you need it!

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