An interesting tale, Amelia – you did well to stick to the 100 words.
* I like how you’ve punctuated the speech * You included some super vocabulary choices – ‘murmured’ ‘spied’ and ‘sighed sadly’
Wish – Try writing titles in capitals to make them stand out more. Also, check the word ‘find’ at the end. What should it be?
Thank you for the great comment, Mr Holder!!!
great vocab #good work
Hey, Amelia!
You must be Scottish if you know about kilts! I have always threatened to wear a kilt for a wedding but the ‘lady in my life’ says, “NO!”
Your writing is just great. Keep using as many WOW words as you can!
I am using this 100WC with Class 3 at Friday Bridge Primary School, Wisbech, Cambridgeshire! Bet they don’t write about a kilt!!!!
Mr H 🙂
wow Amelia you have got good knowledge of kilts!
*You used speech.
*You used capital letters and full stops.
*You used good WOW words. WISH-Write a bit less speech
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An interesting tale, Amelia – you did well to stick to the 100 words.
* I like how you’ve punctuated the speech
* You included some super vocabulary choices – ‘murmured’ ‘spied’ and ‘sighed sadly’
Wish – Try writing titles in capitals to make them stand out more. Also, check the word ‘find’ at the end. What should it be?
Thank you for the great comment, Mr Holder!!!
great vocab #good work
Hey, Amelia!
You must be Scottish if you know about kilts! I have always threatened to wear a kilt for a wedding but the ‘lady in my life’ says, “NO!”
Your writing is just great. Keep using as many WOW words as you can!
I am using this 100WC with Class 3 at Friday Bridge Primary School, Wisbech, Cambridgeshire! Bet they don’t write about a kilt!!!!
Mr H 🙂
wow Amelia you have got good knowledge of kilts!
*You used speech.
*You used capital letters and full stops.
*You used good WOW words.
WISH-Write a bit less speech