Hi Polly – I’m really impressed that you’ve chosen to do this at home. You can have 1HP for that! 🙂
I’ve entered your writing into the 100 word competition for this week.
* You did really well to stick to the limit and include the prompt words.
* You’ve punctuated the speech really well.
* Lovely vocabulary – ‘complained angrily’ ‘drizzle’.
WISH – Try personifying the weather to set the mood. For instance, the clouds could be ‘crying’ onto the world below or the wind could be ‘screaming’ through the trees.
Great writing! I loved how you had all that detail. Great job with no misspelling as far as I can see. Make sure to write a title that makes sense with the story. Great writing. Happy Blogging.
Max from U.S.A. TX
That’s why it’s a 100 word challenge! Don’t worry though – I’m really impressed that you’ve chosen to do this in your own time, Polly and it’s super writing nevertheless.
Dear Polly,
Hi, I’m Isabelle from Mrs. Schmidt’s class in the USA. I liked your story because it was funny. Some of my hobbies are track and soccer. I can’t wait to learn about you and your school.
Your friend,
Isabelle
Hi Polly – I’m really impressed that you’ve chosen to do this at home. You can have 1HP for that! 🙂
I’ve entered your writing into the 100 word competition for this week.
* You did really well to stick to the limit and include the prompt words.
* You’ve punctuated the speech really well.
* Lovely vocabulary – ‘complained angrily’ ‘drizzle’.
WISH – Try personifying the weather to set the mood. For instance, the clouds could be ‘crying’ onto the world below or the wind could be ‘screaming’ through the trees.
I think this is great just try to describe the weather 🙂
Wow Polly! I loved the story the magic boots!
*I like how you started the story in speech.
*Great vocabulary!
*Correct punctuation In the right place.
WISH- Can you think of a better word for said?
Great writing! I loved how you had all that detail. Great job with no misspelling as far as I can see. Make sure to write a title that makes sense with the story. Great writing. Happy Blogging.
Max from U.S.A. TX
I was going to make it match but I only had 100 words.
That’s why it’s a 100 word challenge! Don’t worry though – I’m really impressed that you’ve chosen to do this in your own time, Polly and it’s super writing nevertheless.
Dear Polly,
Hi, I’m Isabelle from Mrs. Schmidt’s class in the USA. I liked your story because it was funny. Some of my hobbies are track and soccer. I can’t wait to learn about you and your school.
Your friend,
Isabelle
What’s track?