Hi! I really like your post! I like how you told the reader that you didn’t like the cows because they are pretty boring! One thing to fix is when you say
I had a bad dream But it came to life![I was dreaming about chickens?] I would say… I couldn’t tell if it was a dream or it was real! That would make more sense and would give the reader suspence. Also this sentence would give you more words to write.
GOOD JOB!
Audrey
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My name is Alex and I am 8 years old. I have one sister. I really like your pictures. They look very evil. That was funny that you were dreaming about chickens. The chickens look like there superheros. I like your title the evil chicken. I like the font that you picked out. I am in Mrs. Schmidt’s 3rd grade from the United States
Your friend,
Alex
Hi Miles; I’ve entered this into the competition for you.
* I love the idea of an ‘Evil Chicken’ – it’s very original! I think it would make a good story if you wanted to add to it.
* You’ve included a good range of punctuation – ( ) ! ? ” ” …
Wish – Vary your openers. ‘So’ is a coordinating conjunction to join two ideas; not start one off.
Hi! I really like your post! I like how you told the reader that you didn’t like the cows because they are pretty boring! One thing to fix is when you say
I had a bad dream But it came to life![I was dreaming about chickens?] I would say… I couldn’t tell if it was a dream or it was real! That would make more sense and would give the reader suspence. Also this sentence would give you more words to write.
GOOD JOB!
Audrey
My 100-word challenge @ http://thebighoot.weebly.com/home-page/detention#comments
Hi Miles,
My name is Alex and I am 8 years old. I have one sister. I really like your pictures. They look very evil. That was funny that you were dreaming about chickens. The chickens look like there superheros. I like your title the evil chicken. I like the font that you picked out. I am in Mrs. Schmidt’s 3rd grade from the United States
Your friend,
Alex
Hi Miles good punctuation and vocabulary!
Bravo miles