horrid henry story

Posted on December 9, 2015 by Jessica
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8 Responses to horrid henry story

  1. Jude BERRY says:
    December 9, 2015 at 3:53 pm

    Good work Jessica!

    * You used Outside (Inside).
    * You used another good word for said- spoke.
    WISH- Make sure your sentences make sense!

  2. William KILBRIDE says:
    December 9, 2015 at 3:56 pm

    *Great punctuation usage.
    *Good use of different word classes.
    WISH-Maybe next time use less dialogue.

  3. Freya S. WESTWOOD says:
    December 9, 2015 at 3:59 pm

    Well done Lowenna! I love your story!

    *I love how much you’ve wrote!
    *I like your background too!
    WISH – Try not to turn your story into a conversation between Miss Lovely Rude Ralf, Margret, Susan and Lowenna.

  4. Torsten PENNEY-PHILLIPS says:
    December 9, 2015 at 4:02 pm

    *Lots of adjectives
    *Lots of speaking in it.
    WISH- At one bit you forgot the”.

  5. Katie J. CUNNINGHAM says:
    December 9, 2015 at 4:13 pm

    Great story Jessica!

    *Good punctuation Jess.
    *Good adjectives.
    WISH-Try not to do 5 people speaking at the same time

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