You seemed to enjoy doing this, William. I also enjoyed reading your wacky mini-story! You did well to stick to the word limit and include the prompt.
* I like how you used an apostrophe for omission in at the start – ’twas
* Being the James Bond fan, – this is a thoughtful opener
* Great vocab – ‘mesmerised’
Wish – You only need to use one exclamation mark at a time. As well as that, remember to always proof-read carefully for any little sp. p. and c. errors
You seemed to enjoy doing this, William. I also enjoyed reading your wacky mini-story! You did well to stick to the word limit and include the prompt.
* I like how you used an apostrophe for omission in at the start – ’twas
* Being the James Bond fan, – this is a thoughtful opener
* Great vocab – ‘mesmerised’
Wish – You only need to use one exclamation mark at a time. As well as that, remember to always proof-read carefully for any little sp. p. and c. errors
Good
very good story #good work