Hi Katie; I’ve entered this into the competition.
* I like the opening – you’ve used commas well for both the 2A and the fronted adverbial
* You included the prompt – But later that day,
Wish – Try spacing your writing out by paragraphing more often. Remember to use TiP ToP to help.
Hi Mr Holder! Thanks for the comment. The next time I do a piece of work like this, I will paragraph it more.
Awesome katie
Comments are closed.
Hi Katie; I’ve entered this into the competition.
* I like the opening – you’ve used commas well for both the 2A and the fronted adverbial
* You included the prompt – But later that day,
Wish – Try spacing your writing out by paragraphing more often. Remember to use TiP ToP to help.
Hi Mr Holder! Thanks for the comment. The next time I do a piece of work like this, I will paragraph it more.
Awesome katie