Dear Finley,
My name is Nolan I am eight years old. My brother’s name is Finian. You did a awsome job using adjectives in your story. Some things you might want to know about me arenthat I love soccer and video games. I am in Mrs Schmidt’s 3 grade class in the USA.
Great to hear from you I too love football that’s what we call it here in the UK, and also I love playing video games like mine craft and Fifa 16. I am in Miss Archers class in year 4. I would love to see what your school works like and I hope to hear from you.
Hi Finley; I’ve entered this into the competition this week.
* I like how you’ve paragraphed your work – especially a new line for a new speaker.
* You remembered to use a comma after the fronted adverbial right at the start.
Wish – check for capital letters and other punctuation inside the speech marks.
Dear Finley,
My name is Nolan I am eight years old. My brother’s name is Finian. You did a awsome job using adjectives in your story. Some things you might want to know about me arenthat I love soccer and video games. I am in Mrs Schmidt’s 3 grade class in the USA.
From,
Nolan
Hi Nolan
Great to hear from you I too love football that’s what we call it here in the UK, and also I love playing video games like mine craft and Fifa 16. I am in Miss Archers class in year 4. I would love to see what your school works like and I hope to hear from you.
From,
Finley